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Fighting the epidemic, we are in action
发布时间:2020-03-08 17:29:44 作者:杜星辰  发布者:1963967070 浏览次数:77  类别:英文作文   优秀指数:★★★
[高中二年级] 贵州省 >> 毕节地区 >> 织金县


Fighting the epidemic, we are in action

  In what should have been a beautiful New Year, something that shouldn't have happened.  New crown pneumonia suddenly hit us, and the epidemic began to spread rapidly, catching everyone off guard.But we are all fighters, this epidemic can't beat us!

  Since the outbreak in Wuhan, the Chinese government has begun to respond quickly, immediately closing Wuhan, and building the Vulcan Mountain Hospital and the Thunder Mountain Hospital at an incredible speed.  At the same time, the media also reported the epidemic quickly, so that everyone came to pay attention to the epidemic and prepare for protective measures. At the same time, during this epidemic, we also saw many noble people, such as Wuhan University student Guo Yue returning to his hometown. Although he did not have any symptoms at the time, But because he immediately took very strict security measures and immediately isolated himself.From the time when Wuhan came back to the diagnosis, many people could be infected during this time, but no one was infected by the virus.

Although the epidemic is still serious and the epidemic has spread in many countries, the World Health Organization has raised the global risk level of the new crown pneumonia epidemic to "very high" from the previous "high". Italy has infected more than 6,000 people, and Iran has infected more than 1,000 people in a day.  However, the epidemic situation in China has begun to stabilize, other countries have responded quickly, and they have learned from China's methods. I believe that the epidemic situation in other countries is only a short-term outbreak and will soon stabilize.

As long as we work together, we will be able to weather the crisis and defeat the virus. I believe that after this epidemic, we will have a better future.

教师点评:
  • 批改教师:汤超然 ( 云南省 >> 昆明市 >> 西山区 )
    批改时间:2020-3-26 20:45:18
    点评指数:★★★
    点评内容:

    Fighting the epidemic, we are in action

    In what should have been a beautiful New Year, something that shouldn't have happened.  New crown pneumonia suddenly hit us, and the epidemic began to spread rapidly, catching everyone off guard.But we are all fighters, this epidemic can't beat us!

    Since the outbreak in Wuhan, the Chinese government has begun to respond quickly, immediately closing Wuhan, and building the Vulcan Mountain Hospital and the Thunder Mountain Hospital at an incredible speed.  At the same time, the media also reported the epidemic quickly, so that everyone came to pay attention to the epidemic and prepare(改为prepared) for protective measures. At the same time(不要重复使用词组,可替换为In the meantime等), during this epidemic, we also saw many noble people, such as Wuhan University student Guo Yue returning(改为returned) to his hometown. Although he did not have any symptoms at the time, But because he immediately took very strict security measures and immediately(不要重复使用单词,改为swiftly isolated himself.From the time when Wuhan came back to the diagnosis, many people could be infected during this time, but no one was infected by the virus.

    Although the epidemic is still serious and the epidemic has spread in(to) many countries, the World Health Organization has raised the global risk level of the new crown pneumonia epidemic to "very high" from the previous "high". Italy has infected more than 6,000 people, and Iran has infected more than 1,000 people in a day.  错误表达,应用There be,如There are more than 6000 people infected by coronavirusHowever, the epidemic situation in China has begun to stabilize, other countries have responded quickly, and they have learned from China's methods. I believe that the epidemic situation in other countries is only a short-term outbreak and will soon stabilize.

    As long as we work together, we will be able to weather the crisis and defeat the virus. I believe that after this epidemic, we will have a better future.

    点评:本文立足现实,紧紧围绕当下新冠病毒蔓延全球的背景进行写作,彰显家国情怀,弘扬主流价值,关注人类命运,体现了中国学生对现世时运的深切把握和关切,值得赞扬!文章行文流畅,能自觉运用高级词汇,合理运用虚拟语气,句型丰富多彩,虽有些许语法错误,但也是因运用高级语法项目所致,且不影响文章阅读,结合上述特征,将本文评定为一类上,最终得分:24分(满分25分)

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