批改教师:陈伟 ( 山东省 >> 烟台市 >> 烟台工贸技师学院 )
批改时间:2013/5/20 18:17:38
点评指数:★
点评内容:
As time goes by, Time is slipping away and it is two years since
I began to be a freshman.However, But in my memory of (looking back to ) the two past (past two) years, I fell (feel) confused now.
When I left my family and friends and started my (the) new university life, I ,at that time, had so many dreams. I looked forward to donging
(trying) everything to enrich my experience during the four years , including study, making friends, participating in group activities
and so on .
However ,I lost (lose all) my passion on study even everything now.
I skip (hop around)now and than (then) and waste lost (lots) of time.
I realize that it is a terrible situation.
People should have a goal, only that he can (can he) know the value
of existence.
Young man ,believe yourself, andyou can do it .
In my opinion, no issue is as good as passion and dreams to make our life more colorful, so I suggest that you should catch your own passion and dreams fast. In addition, I would like to share a poem with you.
Hold fast to dreams 紧紧抓住梦想
For if dreams die 梦想若是消亡
Life is a broken-winged bird 生命就象鸟儿折了翅膀
That can never fly. 再也不能飞翔
Hold fast to dreams 紧紧抓住梦想,
For when dreams go 梦想若是消丧
Life is a barren field 生命就像贫瘠的荒野
Frozen only with snow雪覆冰封,万物不再生长
批改教师:王思捷 ( 作文批改网 )
批改时间:2013/5/21 21:52:43
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点评内容:
As time goes by , it is two years since I began to be a freshman.But in my memory of the two past years , I fell confused.
When I left my family and friends and started my new life , I had so many dreams.I looked forward to donging(doing) everything to enrich my experience during the four years ,including studying,making friends,and participating in group activities and so on .
However I lost my passion on study even everything now.I skip now and than and waste lost of time.I realize that it is a terrible situation.
People should have a goal ,only that he can(can) he know the value of existence. Young man ,believe in yourself,you can do it .