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周末计划
发布时间:2013-05-23 18:30:46 作者:杜雨桐  发布者:2339866202 浏览次数:3010  类别:英文作文   优秀指数:★★★
[小学六年级] 山东省 >> 临沂市 >> 罗庄区 >> 黄山镇 >> 黄山镇中心小学


Usually, I am free at the weekends, but sometimes I also have something to do. This weekend, I will be busy, because at Saturday, I am going to read a magazine in the morning. Afternoon, I will go to the zoo with my grandparents. On Sunday, I will go to the bookstore to buy some books for reading. Afternoon, I will go to the train school to learn Kongfu. At night, I will stay at home and have a good rest
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  • 批改教师:周绍芬 ( 山东省 >> 临沂市 >> 罗庄区 >> 黄山镇 >> 黄山镇英语备课组 )
    批改时间:2013/5/23 19:22:23
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    Usually, I am free at (on)the weekends, but sometimes I also have (few things)something to do. This weekend, I will be busy, because at (on) Saturday, I am going to read a magazine in the morning. Afternoon, I will go to the zoo with my grandparents. On Sunday, I(am going to) will  go to the bookstore to buy some books(to read) for reading . Afternoon, I will go to the train (training) school to learn Kongfu. At night, I will stay at home and have a good rest( .)

     

    雨桐,你周末的活动可真丰富啊!老师很佩服你小小年纪就爱上了 Kongfu,可谓是文武双全啊!老师送你一点小建议:1.注意个别介词的正确用法。2.注意be going to 与will的区别。3.别忘了标点符号哟!一起加油!Come on !

  • 批改教师:李晨超 ( )
    批改时间:2013/5/24 12:34:20
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    Usually, I am free at (on)the weekends, but sometimes I also have (few things)something to do. This weekend, I will be busy, because at (on) Saturday, I am going to read a magazine in the morning. Afternoon, I will go to the zoo with my grandparents. On Sunday, I(am going to) will  go to the bookstore to buy some books(to read) for reading . Afternoon, I will go to the train (training) school to learn Kongfu. At night, I will stay at home and have a good rest.

    Tips :相信你一定会度过一个愉快的周末。要注意介词的使用哦!加油O(∩_∩)O

  • 批改教师:王思捷 ( 作文批改网 )
    批改时间:2013/5/24 14:20:02
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    Usually, I am free at the weekends, but sometimes I also have something to do. This weekend, I will be busy, because at on)Saturday, I am going to read a magazine in the morning. Afternoon, I will go to the zoo with my grandparents. On Sunday, I will go to the bookstore to buy some books for reading. Afternoon(In that afternoon), I will go to the training school to learn Kongfu. At night, I will stay at home and have a good rest
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