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High Technology

发布时间：2014-04-21 22:32:44 作者：张琼  发布者：2362494164@qq.com 浏览次数：3148  类别：中文作文  

  High technology is the  factor that we can't ingore in our life.But we should have a deepen realize.

  For one thing,there is no denying that high technology is more useful for the development of the age.It can not only make more arm in the wars but also make the similar organ for unhealthy people.That's to say,it makes a more and more widen influence in the wars and healthy in same ways.It also makes our life more confortable,like computer

  For another,as the old saying goes,every coin has two sides.we must realize the high technology's disadventage at the same time. It injured people more easier.And makes the quality of polution more and more lower.From another view,it makes an unsure and dangerous environment all over the world.The life doesn't more peaceful in people's heart.

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  High technology is the  factor that we can't ingore (overook) in our life(lives).But we should have a deepen (deeply) realize(realization).

  For one thing,there is no denying that high technology is more useful for the development of the age.It can not only make (produce) more arm (weapons) in the wars but also make the similar (artificial) organ for unhealthy people.That's to say,it makes a more and more widen (wider) influence in (effect on) the wars and healthy in same ways.It also makes our life more confortable,(convenient) like computer

  For another,as the old saying goes,every coin has two sides.we must realize the high technology's disadventage at the same time. It injured people more easier(easily) And makes the quality of polution more and more lower(small) From another view,it makes an unsure and dangerous environment (atmorsphere) all over the world.The life doesn't(isn't) more peaceful in people's heart.