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The sping is coming

发布时间：2014-05-18 00:21:55 作者：张池  发布者：huashuicici 浏览次数：3307  类别：英文作文  

                  The spring is coming

      The spring is coming , and everything looks so beautiful.  Then what are you doing ? Would you as winter sleep animal awake? Would you see the spring of living and loving ? Would you feel the spring breeze slowly float on the willows ?

      As the saying goes that" one year's plan is in spring", and the spring symbolizes Green, Vitality and promise. When you are struggling into the winter , you will think of Selley who written that 'Winter is coming ,  spring will not be long' .   Sure , the winter is going and the spring is coming , the weather turns well , the warm sun will be light on your mind. Some peolpe is struggled in the dark, whether you looks light from the fine spring or not?  I believe that you can, because the spring seems reborn and give people new lives , new action and nem aim.Therefore, the spring is coming you must try your best to grasp the chance, the spring is compare to promise of dance. Only try your best to make a difference, you can create that you think that you can't create achieve.

       If you always think the scary, shy and lazy that you can not make a difference and create achieve. If you are real make decision which make a difference of yourself , you need brave and do what can help you get over in front of factor . Succeed is make of the foot step by step and arquire patience, so you want to make a difference that must do good at yourself. Do not scary all difficulties which you do good to yourself of difficulties you face , because difficulties always will be solved.

      Finally, above all, you must have living and passion as the spring, and you will make renew live to shape yourself and make succeed as the spring.

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  The spring is coming and everything looks so beautiful.Then what are you doing? Would (Do) you ^{wake up} as winter sleep animal awake? Would (Do) you see the spring of living and loving? Would (Do) you feel (notice) the spring breeze slowly float^ting on the willows?

  As the saying goes that" one year's plan is in spring", and the spring symbolizes Green,Vitality and promise. When you are (were) struggling (surffering) into the winter,you will think (thought) of Selley who written (wrote) that 'Winter is coming,spring will not be long'.(If winter comes, can spring be far behind?) Sure (Exactly) the winter is going (has gone) and the spring is coming ^and the weather turns well , the warm sun will be light on (in) your mind. Some peolpe ^who is struggled (stuggling) in the dark, whether you looks (see) light (sunshine) from the fine spring or not?  I believe that you can (did) because the spring seems ^to be reborn and give people new lives,new action and nem (new) aim.Therefore, the spring is coming you must try your best to grasp the chance, the spring is compare to promise of dance. Only try your best to make a difference, you can create (achieve) that you think that you can't (couldn't) create achieve ^before.

  If you always think the scary, shy (shyness) and lazy (lazniess) that you can not make a difference and create achieve. If you are real^ly make ^a decision which make a difference of yourself (to let yourself different), you need brave and do what can help you get over in front of factor.Succeed is make of the foot (accumulated) step by step and arquire (required) patience,so ^if you want to make a difference that must do good at yourself (change yourself right now).Do not ^be scary all difficulties which you do good to yourself of difficulties you face, because difficulties always will be solved.

  Finally, above all, you must have living and passion as the spring, and you will make renew live (your life) to shape yourself and make succeed (be successful) as  the spring.