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机灵丫头的爱情物语 楔子
发布时间:2015-04-25 11:06:00 作者:月儿  发布者:初雪霖沫 浏览次数:2583  类别:中文作文  
[小学六年级] 山东省 >> 临沂市 >> 罗庄区 >> 沂堂镇 >> 麒麟小学


                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                              楔子                                                                                                                                                                 “我真的好舍不得你啊,紫旋在那里不许偷看帅哥哦!”好友李小丫正伤心的说。“我也舍不得你啊。”紫旋也伤心的说着。可心里却想着终于可以脱离李小丫的魔掌了。(好友作者:“紫旋你要去哪呀!”紫旋:  “我去,上哪是你说了算,我还要问你那?”好友作者就去日本做交换生吧!好友作者﹕“拜拜。回头见。”作者同学迪:“作者,这不科学不是韩国吗。”)
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            楔子                                                                                                                                                                

          “我真的好舍不得你啊,紫旋在那里不许偷看帅哥哦!”好友李小丫正伤心的说。“我也舍不得你啊。”紫旋也伤心的说着可心里却想着终于可以脱离李小丫的魔掌了。

         好友作者):“紫旋你要去哪呀!”紫旋:  “我去,上哪是你说了算,我还要问你那?”好友作者):"就去日本做交换生吧!好友作者﹕“拜拜。回头见。”作者同学迪:“作者,这不科学。不是韩国吗?”

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