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Phone
发布时间:2012-10-21 17:32:35 作者:卢志坤  发布者:a18300607747 浏览次数:2587  类别:中文作文  
[小学一年级] 河南省 >> 焦作市 >> 山阳区


Now,it is very important to have a mobile phone.Which help people to work and life well.For example,at the university.we can touch with our parents by the phone.

In retrospect,our parents used to keep touch with others only by writting.Now,we not only communicate by phone,but also can look up web abd to knom more things about our students play the phone clearly and do some things are bad for them.And the phone can harm people by ....

I think phone do not depature our life,but we can rely on the phone all the time. ...... 

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  • 批改教师:王天艳 ( 山东省 >> 临沂市 >> 罗庄区 >> 黄山镇 >> 黄山镇英语备课组 )
    批改时间:2012/10/25 22:25:37
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    Now,it is very important to have a mobile phone,which help people to work and life live well.For example,at the university,we can touch with our parents by the phone.

    In retrospect,our parents used to keep in touch with others only by writting writing.Now,we not only communicate by phone,but also can look up web abd abed to knom know more things about our students play the phone clearly and do some things are bad for them.And the phone can harm people by ....

    I think phone do not depature our life,but we can rely on the phone all the time. ...... 

  • 批改教师:李晨超 ( )
    批改时间:2012/12/6 18:36:10
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    Now,it is very important to have a mobile phone,which help people to work and life (live well.For example,at the university,we can touch with our parents by the phone.

    In retrospect,our parents used to keepin touch with others only by writting writing.Now,we not only communicate by phone,but also can look up web abd (abed) to knom know) more things about our students play the phone clearly and do some things are bad for them.And the phone can harm people by ....

    I think phone do not depature our life,but we can rely on the phone all the time. ...... 

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