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The Positive Impact of Technology on Society

发布时间：2016-12-09 11:30:19 作者：念旧  发布者：767551293 浏览次数：6496  类别：英文作文   优秀指数：★★★

21st century is the century of technology. Nowadays, technology is everywhere around us, which is widely used and brings about lots of changes. The influences it have are positive and significant. According to Jones (2013)” The impact of technology on society is deep”.

First of all, technology has a good effect on communication. According to Smith (2015)”Owing to developments in technology, communication is wireless”. Cell phones become very popular, almost everyone has one. The invention of the mobile phones and computers all due to the technology so that we can make phones and search the Internet. People can send short messages by phones. What’s more, some applications in cell phones also help in communication. New electronic appliances have made our life simpler than ever before. If there is a Wi-Fi or data available, you can share your idea and your photos on those social media applications, such as QQ, We chat and Micro blog. So you can keep in touch with friends and parents whenever and wherever you want. People now can talk to strangers from all over the world and get to know different culture and customs. They also have better opportunity to learn foreign language. Also we will have more chances to befriend with others. According to Smith (2015)”Computer technology, needless to say, has changed the face of the world. The Internet that seeded from computer networking concepts is the most effective communication platform and the largest informational base existing today”. What calls for special attention is satellite, which seems like being far away from us but gives us lots of convenience on communication. To majority of people, the best ways to learn news and events happened around the world are radio and television. The communication signals of radio, television and data communication are based on satellite. According to Smith (2015)” It has made the world a smaller place to live in”.

In terms of our daily life, our study and work can’t go on smoothly without the support of technology. Smith (2015) argued that technology has automated many of the critical process in the industry and the household. On the one hand, using Internet is easy to gain latest events in the world and accurate figures needed. Technology allows students to keep abreast of the latest developments. According to Smith (2015)”It has brought distant places closer and simplified information access”. Furthermore, thanks to the technology, our advanced classrooms are equipped with computers and projectors. The piece of technology most important as a learning tool must be the computer. Those students who are fortunate enough to have access to technological resources should take every advantage of them. On the other hand, technology automates many industries. People can handle machines instead of doing dangerous works and repeating boring works once and once again. According to Smith (2015)”Automation brought about by technology has saved human effort and time to a large extent. Today’s is the age of robotics. Machines can learn, adopt new things and perform tasks with near human efficiency”. For instance, the invention of computers dramatically increases work efficiency and helps complete many difficult tasks that were impossible in the past. What’s more, the cars become more advanced so that we can drive faster and more comfortable. Modern medicine prolongs people’s life and relieves patients of sufferings from many diseases. There is no doubt that our life just be surrounded by technology. It really gives us a lot of convenience.

 Meanwhile, we cannot ignore the fact that technology has a great contribution to scientific research. Many new products, such as weather and communication satellites, are also products of space programs, and they have benefited people all over the world. And what's more, scientific knowledge about outer space has been acquired by mankind. The journey to outer space and other planets is not a dream any more. Rockets and space shuttles can help us realize the dream of space travel. Science and technology has greatly broadened our vision and understanding of the material world level. As is shown by the case of synthesizing new elements, scientists are trying their best to do it. Some new elements that can’t be discovered have already been constantly synthesized. The appearance of new elements can help human understand better about the question” how does the physical universe come to be?” The secrets of nature are being revealed step by step.

Therefore, we have every reason to believe that technology has already gone deep into all aspects of society. Society will break down if there is no technology. So technology has brought about positive impact on society and it is inevitable. Thanks to the development of science and technology, human society has enjoyed continuous prosperity and more convenience. We all hope that modern technology will reach a higher level, because modern technology makes life more convenient indeed.

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  21st century is the century of ^takes technology ^{as its core}. Nowadays, technology is everywhere around us, which is widely used and brings ^bringing about lots of changes. The influences it have are positive and significant. According to Jones (2013)” The impact of technology on society is deep”.

  First of all, technology has a good effect on communication. According to Smith (2015)”Owing to developments in technology, communication is wireless”. ^{As c}ell phones become very popular (prevail), almost everyone has one. The (Thanks to the) invention of the mobile phones and computers all due to the technology so that we can make phones ^calls and search the Internet. People can send short (text) messages by phones. What’s more, some applications in cell phones also help in communication. New electronic appliances have made our life simpler than ever before. If there is a Wi-Fi or data ^is available, you can share your idea and your photos on those social media applications, such as QQ, We chat and Micro blog. So you can keep in touch (contact) with friends and parents whenever and wherever you want. People now can talk to strangers from all over the world and get to know different culture and customs. They also have better opportunity to learn foreign language. Also we will have more chances to be friend with others. According to Smith (2015)”Computer technology, needless to say, has changed the face of the world. The Internet that seeded from computer networking concepts is the most effective communication platform and the largest informational base existing today”. What calls for (should be paid) special attention is satellite. which (It) seems like being far away from us but gives us lots of convenience on communication. To majority of people, the best ways to learn news and events happened (happening) around (in) the world are radio and television. The communication signals of radio, television and data communication are based on satellite. According to Smith (2015)” It has made the world a smaller place to live in”.

  In terms of our daily life, our study and work can’t go on smoothly without the support of technology. Smith (2015) argued that technology has automated many of the critical process in the industry and the household. On the one hand, using Internet is easy to gain latest events in the world and accurate figures needed. Technology allows students to keep abreast (follow the pace) of the latest developments. According to Smith (2015)”It has brought distant places closer and simplified information access”. Furthermore, thanks (owing) to the technology, our advanced classrooms are equipped with computers and projectors. The (Most improtantly, the) piece of technology most important as a learning tool ^{for learning} must be the computer. Those students who are fortunate enough to have access to technological resources should take every advantage of them. On the other hand, technology automates many industries. People can handle machines instead of doing dangerous works and repeating boring works once and once again. According to Smith (2015)”Automation brought about by technology has saved human effort and time to a large extent. Today’s is the age of robotics. Machines can learn, adopt new things and perform tasks with near human efficiency”. For instance, the invention of computers dramatically increases ^the work efficiency and helps complete many difficult tasks that were impossible in the past. What’s more, the cars become more advanced so that we can drive fasterly and more comfortable (comfortably). Modern medicine prolongs people’s life and relieves patients of sufferings from many diseases. There is no doubt that our life just be surrounded by technology. It really gives us a lot of convenience.

  Meanwhile, we cannot ignore the fact that technology has a great contribution to scientific research. Many new products, such as weather and communication satellites, are also products of space programs, and they have benefited people all over the world. And what's more, scientific knowledge about outer space has been acquired by mankind. The journey to outer space and other planets is not a dream any more. Rockets and space shuttles can help us realize the dream of space travel. Science and technology has greatly broadened our vision and understanding of the material world level. As is shown by the case of synthesizing new elements, scientists are trying their best to do it. Some new elements that can’t be discovered have already been constantly synthesized. The appearance of new elements can help human understand better about the question” how does the physical universe come to be?” The secrets of nature are being revealed step by step.

  Therefore, we have every reason to believe that technology has already gone deep into all aspects of society. Society will break down if there is no technology. So technology has brought about positive impact on society and it is inevitable. Thanks to the development of science and technology, human society has enjoyed continuous prosperity and more convenience. We all hope that modern technology will reach a higher level, because modern technology makes life more convenient indeed.

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  21st century is the century of technology. Nowadays, technology is everywhere around us, which is widely used and brings about lots of changes. The influences it have are positive and significant. According to Jones (2013)” The impact of technology on society is deep”.

  First of all, technology has a good effect on communication. According to Smith (2015)”Owing to developments in technology, communication is wireless”. Cell phones become very popular, almost everyone has one. The invention of the mobile phones and computers all due to the technology so that we can make phones and search the Internet. People can send short messages by phones. What’s more, some applications in cell phones also help in communication. New electronic appliances have made our life simpler than ever before. If there is a Wi-Fi or data available, you can share your idea and your photos on those social media applications, such as QQ, We chat and Micro blog. So you can keep in touch with friends and parents whenever and wherever you want. People now can talk to strangers from all over the world and get to know different culture and customs. They also have better opportunity to learn foreign language. Also we will have more chances to befriend with others. According to Smith (2015)”Computer technology, needless to say, has changed the face of the world. The Internet that seeded from computer networking concepts is the most effective communication platform and the largest informational base existing today”. What calls for special attention is satellite, which seems like being far away from us but gives us lots of convenience on communication. To majority of people, the best ways to learn news and events happened around the world are radio and television. The communication signals of radio, television and data communication are based on satellite. According to Smith (2015)” It has made the world a smaller place to live in”.

  In terms of our daily life, our study and work can’t go on smoothly without the support of technology. Smith (2015) argued that technology has automated many of the critical process in the industry and the household. On the one hand, using Internet is easy to gain latest events in the world and accurate figures needed. Technology allows students to keep abreast of the latest developments. According to Smith (2015)”It has brought distant places closer and simplified information access”. Furthermore, thanks to the technology, our advanced classrooms are equipped with computers and projectors. The piece of technology most important as a learning tool must be the computer. Those students who are fortunate enough to have access to technological resources should take every advantage of them. On the other hand, technology automates many industries. People can handle machines instead of doing dangerous works and repeating boring works once and once again. According to Smith (2015)”Automation brought about by technology has saved human effort and time to a large extent. Today’s is the age of robotics. Machines can learn, adopt new things and perform tasks with near human efficiency”. For instance, the invention of computers dramatically increases work efficiency and helps complete many difficult tasks that were impossible in the past. What’s more, the cars become more advanced so that we can drive faster and more comfortable. Modern medicine prolongs people’s life and relieves patients of sufferings from many diseases. There is no doubt that our life just be surrounded by technology. It really gives us a lot of convenience.

  Meanwhile, we cannot ignore the fact that technology has a great contribution to scientific research. Many new products, such as weather and communication satellites, are also products of space programs, and they have benefited people all over the world. And what's more, scientific knowledge about outer space has been acquired by mankind. The journey to outer space and other planets is not a dream any more. Rockets and space shuttles can help us realize the dream of space travel. Science and technology has greatly broadened our vision and understanding of the material world level. As is shown by the case of synthesizing new elements, scientists are trying their best to do it. Some new elements that can’t be discovered have already been constantly synthesized. The appearance of new elements can help human understand better about the question” how does the physical universe come to be?” The secrets of nature are being revealed step by step.

  Therefore, we have every reason to believe that technology has already gone deep into all aspects of society. Society will break down if there is no technology. So technology has brought about positive impact on society and it is inevitable. Thanks to the development of science and technology, human society has enjoyed continuous prosperity and more convenience. We all hope that modern technology will reach a higher level, because modern technology makes life more convenient indeed.

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